TheCalliton Posted March 8, 2009 Share Posted March 8, 2009 alas...lonely is th elif eof a wandererno knowing of what comes nextno hope of peacefull restnot knowing what is trueor what to do All that you knowis how to goand what can you trustnot a sword, for it will rustnot a lover, for death will claim their heartonly you're own heart may you follow thanks for taking time to read thisi know it sucks, but my friend made me post itplz pm me if it's worth anything Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TheCalliton Posted March 17, 2009 Author Share Posted March 17, 2009 thanks for the comments people... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dezdimona Posted March 17, 2009 Share Posted March 17, 2009 its nice.You had a nice rythym up until the last stanza.A little editing and a rewrite would make it really good. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TheCalliton Posted March 18, 2009 Author Share Posted March 18, 2009 thanksi have made several versions of thisthank you for commenting :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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