the dead will burn part 1

[reaper13]

i forgot to say that this will be from wildfire's point of view. this is my first atempt at a first person point of view story. i need feedback

 

 

 

As I ran along the rooftops I could hear the mob behind me. Drawing my gun I aimed over my shoulder and fired off a few rounds. A few went down but their were over 30 left. I was quickly running out of room. As the edge of the roof drew near I sped up. This would be child’s play. At the last second I jumped and flew across the street. Covering my face with my hands I crashed through a window of the apartment building on the other side of the street. I turned around and saw a mob of infected standing on the roof I just jumped off. Suddenly I heard a shriek and a hunter flew at me. Pulling back my fist I waited until the last second and punched it in the chest. I could feel it’s ribs crack inward. The force of the punch sent if flying into the building on the other side of the street. The impact shook the building so much that some common infected fell off the roof.

 

I was about to lay down on the bed and catch my breath when I heard men yelling. Walking over to the window I looked down and saw five soldiers running from a tank. When the tank was under me I jumped over the railing and fell three stories. I landed feet first on the tanks head. The force sent the tank crashing head first into the ground. I quickly drew my combat knife and slit it’s throat as well as its spinal cord. That’s when I heard it. The sound that everyone fears these days. The sound of a girl crying……

[dezdimona]

I like it. You've shown considerable improvement!

[reaper13]

that means a lot comming from you :thanks: you've been here from my first story haven't you.

[dezdimona]

that means a lot comming from you :thanks: you've been here from my first story haven't you.

indeed and I'm very pleased to see the strides your making. this one is polished more than your previous ones and written in a way to hold ones attention.Very good indeed!