Herculine Posted February 18, 2010 Share Posted February 18, 2010 I like the way it reads like a series of personal diary entries, but intertwining them with passages of more traditional third-person narratives could give you more storytelling options IMO. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Murlock99 Posted February 18, 2010 Author Share Posted February 18, 2010 Actually I might just do that, afterall I do need somewhere to start when I'm done that knock on the door part Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Murlock99 Posted February 18, 2010 Author Share Posted February 18, 2010 It was dark underneath the bed but better than being shot, a grey haired man had just walked in the door and I was trying to get out my rifle when I realized he was talking to someone. 'Oh Master, please stop PLEASE!!!! NO this flesh is too fine and it is all mine" A blood curdling scream pierced the small shacks air............... Well there is not much else to say about it I ran and I ran for my life, I looked back and the old man was running very quickly for his age at me, his face was mutated like a zombies and was drenched in flesh and blood. I was more frightened then ever before in my life. Some things in the wasteland are better not known about and this is one of the top 10. The world blurred past me and I saw about 6 talon company mercenaries shooting at the zombie. I was lucky or was I, where the talon company going to be hostile.Log 5 See what happens next Poll:Is this a good story ? Comment and kudo please Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Markharow Posted February 18, 2010 Share Posted February 18, 2010 This is interesting different in a way Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
shadowmadnezz Posted February 18, 2010 Share Posted February 18, 2010 ghoul huh? lol I was close :biggrin: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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