My character roleplay, need more ideas.

[roiyaru]

So Now that ive fully modded out my oblivion the way I want to create a story for my character to roleplay by. I have came up with a story but I am unsure about it and would like second opinions and ideas. What I wanted to do was create a story that allowed me to play both ends of the spectrum in game, good and evil. keep in mind im not a master story writer xD so try not to be too critical, this is more about the story than the writing.

 

Katsumi is a japanese name meaning victorious beauty.

 

Katsumi wakes up in the prison cell, bewildered and wondering why she finds herself in such a place. She cant seem to recall what happened at first, but suddenly the painful memories begin to filter back to her. She recalls being in a beautiful home, but something was wrong. The tapestries on the walls were bloodied, looking around the chamber many bodies in elegant clothing lay about, every one of them dead. Tables, bookcases, and even pottery was smashed to bits on the ground as if there had been a terrible accident. More memories come back, there were men all about her, every one of them carrying clubs or weapons and fully covered in armor that reflected the torchlight, burning her eyes. They were beating her, for what reason she didnt know, but she did know that before they were finished she wished she was dead...yet they wouldnt allow that telling her, "We wont kill you, but you will be punished for your heritage." . Barely awake, they took her to the imperial guard and framed her for theivery, explaining that the reason she was beaten was that she had assaulted them and attempted to steal from their home. Katsumi had made a feeble attempt to protest yet due to the swolleness of her jaw she couldnt speak, all that came out was a feeble whimper which only earned her a kick from her assailants.

 

Soon after she wakes up in the prison cell pondering her situation. She doesnt understand why she was beaten, who the people in the house were, nor what they meant by "punished for your heritage". In fact she could not recall a single memory from her life other than what she already had. In despair she began praying to the nine for help, pleading that they would help her make sense of life and get her out of prison and she would be eternally gratefully and serve them. Suddenly they answered her, though she could not see them they spoke to her heart. "We will help you leave here and find your past, if you stay true to your promise. Break it and your are in danger of the wrath of the gods, always recall how we helped you in your time of need. You will be given a chance to prove yourself." Their words inspired her and she swore to serve them for all her days, fighting the evils of the world like the men who had assaulted her. She waited patiently, all the while some insolent dark elf in a chamber opposite her made meager attempts at insults to assauge his own anger at being locked up. Suddenly guards showed up at her cell, her heart jumped in her chest and she obeyed their commands to wait by the window as it was unlocked. The emperor recognized her, suddenly reaching out his hand and smoothing back the hair from her face. He spoke a few words to her and proceeded to leave the chamber through a secret exit in the wall. Though the guard told her to stay, she followed them silently always sticking to the shadows. After much walking, the emperor was attacked. Katsumi knew it would be best to stay in the shadows but she jumped out and tried to defend the emperor yet accomplished nothing. He was struck down before her eyes and the assassin advanced on her next, fear set her to trembling. She tried to run but her legs wouldnt listen and she collapsed against the wall, watching the man get closer. Suddenly a blade appeared through his stomach, the emperors guards had saved her but went right back to fighting in another area. She ran as far and fast as she could till she was far beyond the sewers and slept on the forest floor that night.

 

 

Over the years she spent time training to save the weak and helpless. Soon she became known as a hero in cyrodil, a valiant warrior, a powerfull sorceress who traveled and assisted any in need and destroyed any evil that opposed her. Becoming the master of the fighters guild, the leader of the mages and having been so helpful to cyrodils citizens gave her great influence over the land, a dangerous amount of influence. One day, she entered a cave that was rumored to be inhabited by vampires, many innocent travelers had been waylaid by there. Upon her entrance she immediately saw them having a meeting and approached boldy, sword drawn. The man at the head of the group turned to her and looked her in the eye. What she saw struck her to the core of her being, it was a vampire and there was nothing unusual about him. What made her speechless was the fact that she recognized this man even though she didnt know how. Suddenly the mans face was alight with happiness, he ran towards and embraced her calling her name. Again as had happened in the prison cell her memories began flowing back of the night she was beaten. Yet along with that came the memories of her life. She had grown up in a wealthy family, they were well off but had been exiled from society. They were vampires and had been found out, so they had built a castle secreted from the peoples of cyrodil except close family friends. Despite being an exile, Katsumi had led a great life and was youthful and beautiful. The vampire hunters had found out their location, and came to their home. No one was left alive, the whole family and every servant was murdered except for Katsumi. Now she recalled their cruel words, "We wont kill you, but you will be punished for your heritage." She felt sick, she collapsed in the mans arms and remembered nothing more.

 

Later on that day she woke up and was being tended to by who she now recognized as a close family friend many years ago. Looking around she realized she recognized other people there also. Suddenly a rage so great it threatened to consume everything around flared up inside of her. Her only thought was revenge and hate for the people who had killed her family and for the people of cyrodil who had not accepted her for what she was. She cursed the gods, "You told me that if I break my promise I threaten to incur your wrath, I no longer care. I will live my life for me and my revenge, all who get in my way will be killed." So she left, and brought the other vampires she could find with her to fix her old home. Using her enourmous magical power and skill with a blade against the innocent and striking down all who opposed her will. Soon she held the whole world under her sway and named herself queen of the empire while all the righteous trembled in their hiding places and even the gods looked upon the monster they had created in fear.

 

Thanks for reading :)

[Megatarius]

Could you please separate that out into paragraphs? Nobody is going to read a giant wall of text.

 

 

It starts out interesting though, with the guards mistreating her. This game needs to show way more teeth for medieval times.

[roiyaru]

Could you please separate that out into paragraphs? Nobody is going to read a giant wall of text.

 

 

It starts out interesting though, with the guards mistreating her. This game needs to show way more teeth for medieval times.

 

Thanks for the tip, its all seperated now :D. hopefully ill get some ideas

[Megatarius]

Well, that's a pretty cool use of the game world in a story.

 

 

The problem is, everyone has their own ideas, and you probably won't get very many responses because most people will want to use their ideas in their own game.