Kuraikiba Posted June 19, 2011 Share Posted June 19, 2011 A Requiem of Death Cerulean spatters, crystal shattersAs it hits the ground of bones and ashes scatterLike meteors falling from a Viridian skyGentle winds whistle ethereal tunes on a vernal night I'm always calling and always falling in this ebony meadowI watch the ivory stars through a betwixt windowOf love, truth, longsuffering and lifeEvery rose has a thorn and a razor like a amaranthine knife I wait, called by a requiem of deathBut I still stay, surrounded by a thousand emerald blades of grassAs I watch a million shooting star and comets fly over meBeautiful whistling saccharine moonstone bells in harmony As fires blaze inside, and time has left me to dieOn this glassy field on lieIn time, in time, it all just passes byAnd when I come to pass and say goodbyeThe ghostly amethyst moon sinks in the skyAnd the last thing I will remember is a smileAs my life and stars just leaves my soul for a while Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
LordWushin Posted June 21, 2011 Share Posted June 21, 2011 Very good! I feel as tho it was made from the heart, touching mine! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kuraikiba Posted June 21, 2011 Author Share Posted June 21, 2011 Yep. It's sort of the twin to Ngora, Star of the Void (Another great poem of mine, lower in the page). It's about a man who is on the final minutes of his life, and he lies in a meadow, not reflecting on his life, but ratherwatching the incredible beauty of earth in a comet and meteor shower, which lights up the skies and the auroras,making them gleam and flash and sparkle the most amazingly beautiful colors he had ever seen. Not worrying aboutthe final moments, as his body slowly started dying, and life was leaving him slowly, he felt just an incredible happinessas he watched the most beautiful display of the heavens ever seen, and as he breathed his last breath, he simply shedtears of joy, and experienced the truest happiness a human being could have. I would like feedback on a similar subject to this as well. I am a book writer (yes, I wrote my first when I was ten) but myfirst decent book was made when I was about 17, which is a romantic epic called the Florentine Sniper, but I'm not goingto post that as it is too long and, even though very toned down on almost everything, I am not sure if the admins might takeit as NSFW because I used very intense verbal, but not drawn, visuals concerning violence. I'd have to check with an admin. I digress. I meant to state that I am planning on writing a new book, and I'd like to know if people here think I should botherwith the effort. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
LordWushin Posted June 21, 2011 Share Posted June 21, 2011 I think you should! If it is anything like your poems, you will do great! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kuraikiba Posted June 21, 2011 Author Share Posted June 21, 2011 Well, my FIRST serious one was, the next is going to be a little darker. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Keanumoreira Posted June 21, 2011 Share Posted June 21, 2011 Another great piece. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kuraikiba Posted June 21, 2011 Author Share Posted June 21, 2011 I try my best to please. :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Flintlockecole Posted June 21, 2011 Share Posted June 21, 2011 (edited) Dark writing is good writing lol. Me think's the book mod could use an update sooner or later. Edited June 21, 2011 by Flintlockecole Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kuraikiba Posted June 21, 2011 Author Share Posted June 21, 2011 You got that write. :P Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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