Iluventi Posted December 17, 2003 Posted December 17, 2003 Hey.. I just wrote this...I'm kind of new to prose...and this is a pretty lousy attempt...but I'm happy with it. What do you think? All the good times, come back to meto make me grieve over what we had.You've made me laugh, made me crybut I'd give it all away, just to have it back again. Dave
ShinJiOh Posted December 17, 2003 Posted December 17, 2003 it's short i'll give it that but not all poetry is long. in the poem is it that you are asking all the good times to come back to you or something else e.g. what do you mean by good times, what would you give away just to have good times again :blink:
Iluventi Posted December 17, 2003 Author Posted December 17, 2003 It's to do with me splitting up with my girlfriend.I would give all that I feel priveledged to have, just to have her back, just for it to be back like it was 2 weeks ago. All time I spent with her, was good(due to her), thus Good times is a personification of her, I suppose?
Vamp_Roland Posted December 18, 2003 Posted December 18, 2003 Its pretty good for you being new at it. Good job and keep it up.
Arkayan Posted December 19, 2003 Posted December 19, 2003 Its good i like it. It also gets your meaning across and thats the point of it it doesnt have to be long.
SilvuruAgnost Posted December 19, 2003 Posted December 19, 2003 hmm.. I taught it was a fine litle ridle
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