You wouldn't know

[ManIndaHat]

This is a poem i wrote when i got bored titled "You wouldn't know"

 

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You wouldn't understand the things i do,

the thoughts i think,

the feelings i feel.

You wouldn't understand the ryhmes i write,

the poems i read,

or the songs i sing.

You wouldn't understand, so i ask you not to,

I ask you to listen,

i ask you to feel,

i ask you to think.

But mostly, i plead you to think, listen and feel.

I ask you to understand this,

one feeling, one time, one place.

I asked you to take it with you, to let the thought live.

think about it, feel it, listen to it.

But when i told you,

you did not,

you laughed and scorned it.

As you walked away it floated on the breeze,

and slowly died.

You didn't understand

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Tell em what you think

[doomjockey]

It's ok, kinda like my art is ok.

 

Meaning good try, but there's always room for improvement. Improvement in the meter, improvement in the rhythm, and tweaking the word choice a few hairs to keep any unintentional repitition to a minimum.