A poem I wrote, "Revenge"

[SimVig]

This is my first attempt to write something that rhymes, so bear with me.

 

To Theta: I only just noticed this forum :)

 

My mind is blank,

I see no light.

The world is dark,

I drown in blight.

 

There is no joy

Left here for us.

There is no happiness,

No trust.

 

All hope is gone,

The world is drowned,

The death has come

To claim the land.

 

But deep inside

My soul there sparks

A glimpse of light

A thought there starts.

 

I close my eyes

And concentrate,

Trying to hear

My thoughts of late.

 

In thinking hard

I realize:

My mind is not yet

Robbed of light.

 

A will there still

A strong exists:

It will wake up,

It still resists.

 

And now my mind

Is clear again.

And I perceive

My jailors ten.

 

My memory

Returns to me

And I recall

The things I see.

 

I shall get strong,

I will break free

And bring swift vengeance

Unto thee.

 

King of death,

You’ll not escape!

I will hunt down

Your crimson grave.

 

But now I am,

Held by beasts

Who serve you well,

Despite all tests.

 

When I escape,

I will kill fast

Your servants

And be free at last.

 

I’ll drink their blood

And not be slain

By vile liquids

In their brain.

 

I feel the strength

Return to me,

I feel my arms,

I clearly see.

 

I cry out loud

And break my bonds,

I stand up tall

Despite all odds.

 

The beasts of death

Come all at me,

But I am ready,

I will be free.

 

I fight all ten,

All ten at once,

And kill them all

Without my lance.

 

I drink their blood

And feel my strength

Return in full,

I see the length.

 

The length of prison

Where I was chained,

My strength now fully

Is regained.

 

I take my sword,

So long from me

It was hidden

In the tree.

I feel the handle

And the blade,

I now remember

All deeds I made.

 

I fought the tide

Of doom that came

From distant land

To this land tame.

 

Long time ago

A leader was I

And I beat back

All forces thy.

 

Too long I fought,

Too weak became,

And your deceit

Is here to blame.

 

When I had fallen

You rose up

And stained this land

And raised your cup.

 

To victory

Against your foe,

The path was clear

Far down below.

 

But your mistake

Was it that you

Did not kill me

And held me too.

 

And now I’m back,

Revenge is near,

And you will feel

The taste of fear.

 

Now I know

What I must do:

I’ll seek you out

And end your rule.

 

I know I must

Make up my mind

And start my journey

You to find.

 

The night is dark,

I barely see,

I know I must fight,

Now that I’m free.

 

The road is so long,

I feel the wind cold,

This world has become

So lifeless and old.

 

I journey for hours,

And yet I don’t feel

No hunger, no thirst,

No urge down to kneel.

 

I do not feel tired,

I don’t want to sleep.

What’s happening?

Why can’t I weep?

 

My hands have become

So cold and so white

I shudder with fear

At this terrible sight.

 

But no time for this,

I need to press on,

I have to avenge

For all that you’ve done.

 

Twelve hours have passed,

And yet there’s no light.

And still I don’t feel

Tired in the night.

 

What’s happened to me?

Am I still what I was?

Have you taken my soul?

Was death really so close?

 

Whatever the case,

I still run with all might.

To catch up with you

And end this damn night.

 

At last there’s a town:

On horizon I see.

Is there anyone left

Alive there but me?

 

I reach the town gates,

They’re ruined and broke.

The guards lie dead

In the dark misty smoke.

I continue my way

Without second thought.

Though my mind feels the sorrow,

My heart does not.

 

There is nothing alive

In this desolate land.

I swear you shall die

Some day by my hand!

 

Ten leagues I have passed

And still there’s no life.

Not even the trees

Have stood up to your knife.

 

I remember this place,

I’ve been here before.

The darkness gets thicker,

I hear distant roar.

 

What could be lurking

In places I know?

This was my home,

What could it be now?

 

Roar after roar,

There is something here.

I steady my sword

And make my mind clear.

 

It charges at me,

Your creature of fear.

Yet I feel no dread,

It is getting near.

 

It seems quite confused

At my standing still.

But nothing will stop me,

Its blood now to spill.

 

One slash of the sword,

It’s down to its knees.

The dark stench of blood

Spreads with the breeze.

 

And into the darkness

I still make my way.

When will at last come

This great fateful day?

 

I come to my house,

In ruins it lies.

I open the door

To hear desperate cries.

 

A moment to pass,

The silence now falls.

I go on inside,

Curiosity calls.

 

A monster of fear

Runs at me once more.

I raise up my sword

And kill like before.

 

I go on to the rooms

From where the cries came,

I find all who I knew:

They all died the same.

 

The rage in my heart

Rises up like the flame.

They were frightened to death.

Your head I will claim!

 

I look at them dead,

Yet I find no tears.

I leave them to rot,

Right here with their fears.

 

I can see a dark shape

Against the black sky.

It was not here before,

There was nothing so high.

 

My heart is enraged,

I run to the tower

That grows ever taller

With each passing hour.

 

A sound near my ear,

An arrow it was.

It just nearly missed me,

I’m already too close.

 

Another comes down,

And pierces my arm,

I don’t feel any pain,

It did me no harm.

 

I gather my rage,

And focus my mind,

The next one that comes,

I strike quickly aside.

Deflecting the arrows,

I run to the walls.

The door opens and I

Step in the dark halls.

 

I’m confronted at once

By enemies vile.

I kill them in seconds,

And make a huge pile.

 

But I can now feel,

That your servants are not,

So determined to kill me

Now that I here got.

 

Up long flights of stair

I go without rest,

At last I will find

Your dark evil nest.

 

I finally stand

In the hall on the top.

And you’re here surrounded

By your deadly mob.

 

I see you again,

A long time has passed!

At last I am here,

And you will not last!

 

I am so enraged,

I can barely see

My foes that now come

All charging at me.

 

A cry echoes loud,

From my lungs it came.

And suddenly they all

Bow down to my name.

 

No matter, I’m here

For only one thing.

And nothing will stop me

From killing the king.

 

We fight there for long,

And still I don’t win.

The anger runs strong,

My patience runs thin.

 

After so many hours,

His head I strike down.

He falls down before me,

I take up his crown.

 

His servants now listen

To my every word,

My sanity fading,

I now lead this herd.

 

Once more I’m the leader,

With my last thought I see,

I finally realize

How you came to be.

[Almelexia]

Puh thats a long text. But it was good! I got some rytm when i read it.

[Iluventi]

Wow...moving poetry.. very well done :)

 

:)

[SimVig]

Thanks for reading my stuff and replying! I appreciate it.

[Akrid]

Intresting, and it told a story. In the end you mentioned killing a king and wearing his crown. The king wasn't supposed to be symbolizing Theta was it? As you adressed it to her at the begining. Because if so you should know Theta is a female, that would make her a queen instead, and also when you donned the crown that would make you a drag queen. But I'm sure I just mis-concieved the meaning, I'm pretty slow grammer and literature.

 

 

Oh you where just addressing a message to her at the begging, ok nevermind.

[SimVig]

I addressed the message to Theta because while we were talking with her in IRC she got the idea to propose this forum. I just told her why I hadn't posted earlier. The poem has nothing to do with anything here.

[hundinman]

GREAT! I am inspired to write poetry of my own. It was long but well worth reading.

[Multi]

Creepily well written! It captures emotion very well, and shows the mentality behind revenge, very good!