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The Adventures of Japet and Mia-Part 2


IndorilTheGreat

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...his father >had told< him...

 

In part 1,you said Japed's father had died before his birth,yet here he's telling Japed about the shield.Was this intentional or something else?

He's talking in past tense, so it isn't a problem tbh. When something/someone is talked about in past tense it usually means it or the person in question doesn't exist anymore, however, if he had used "has always told him", it would refer the person as still alive and kicking. Anyway, not going to start a whole literature lesson here, it's generally boring.(Might just be me.:P)

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I like these series(even if it is 2 parts so far) but i have to ask...

 

 

He moved to the tent to get his rucksack. He pulled out his prized steel gauntlets given to him by his father, and his shield bearing his family's emblem. "When you fight your enemies, always let them know who they're dealing with, his father had told him. "That way, they won't mess with you again

 

In part 1,you said Japed's father had died before his birth,yet here he's telling Japed about the shield.Was this intentional or something else?

 

By the way i have a Fanfic story too.It 4 chapters so far but i recently started it though.THe link to it is at the bottom of my sig,below the pic

 

Oops! You're right! I screwed up there... I suppose I could change it to "his trainer."

 

Good for you! You actually remembered! Even I didn't notice that slip-up... Kudos to you.

 

 

Part 3 will be coming soon... With even more adventure!

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