Freeradikul

[Timihendrix91]

I really like the synth intro, so I think i'll keep that in (I've also received positive responces about that too..so whatever?).

 

when the piano starts, and continues till about 1:32. It's simply too distracting and overpowering, can't really hear the piano. The one at 2:11 isn't as bad, but could still stand to be toned down or replaced with something less offensive. At 2:50 that first one starts again, drowning out the piano, again

yeah that's just my noobiness at recording i think. I think it would be a lot better if I had access to someone who was good at recording stuff, lol

 

Essentially, focus more on the heart of the piece, the guitar, use the piano to keep things interesting, and use everything else as more like background, meant to only be noticed by those who are paying attention. Right now all the stuff that should be in the background is just too overpowering.

Okay, I'll try to think of ways to do that.

 

Thanks again for the comments :)

[Vagrant0]

I really like the synth intro, so I think i'll keep that in (I've also received positive responces about that too..so whatever?).

Maybe just shorten it so that it isn't 1/3 of the song? It isn't that it doesn't sound cool initially, it's that it doesn't seem to fit with the rest of the song.

[humanbean234]

My two-cents worth (mind you, I play acoustic, and mostly rhythm guitar... haven't got the finger length or hand-speed for lead).

 

The glosso sounds at the start don't segue well into the rest of the piece (that's a recording technique, not a composing criticism), with the odd static/white-noise sound between 0:45 and 0:55, lapsing into a near-silence before the guitar arpeggio starts.

 

The glosso sounds aren't in the same key as the guitar/piano chord progression. If you really like the opening aura-thing, you should make them from the same chord used by the guitar.

 

It kinda' noodles around for a bit, and I kept expecting some bass or drums. Drums are helpful, but not necessary... bass, however, or some other low-end done with keyboard, would expand the sound considerably.

 

The guitar/piano riff you finally get into between 2:55 and 3:08 has potential (in my book) to be expanded into a verse-pattern if you should decide to incorporate lyrics. Keep that theme on your backburner.

 

Just remember; the music industry is a fickle biatch... you get ten years to write the material for your first album.

You get six months to write the material for your second one, or the public will completely forget about you.

 

Keep pluggin' away; I've written over 75 songs, of which I've retained six in my repertoire... all the rest were crap.