DracoRazgriz Posted October 6, 2008 Share Posted October 6, 2008 I wrote this about 4 years ago for a school competition. Black Hole Unseen in this open sky,sucking up everything in its own feral way. Light never reaching,rocks always colliding,dirt always shifting,gravity overwhelming. A force unbounding in power,a great heaping maw grasping victims in its fatally seductive grip. With uncounting horrors lurking behind its death mask,paralyzing you in the chest as you gaze into that black mass. So what do think of my poem - Raz Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dezdimona Posted October 6, 2008 Share Posted October 6, 2008 I like it,it has power and depth! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DracoRazgriz Posted October 6, 2008 Author Share Posted October 6, 2008 well, from the powerful to just plain silly. The Cat The cat likes to sleep around the house. The cat is always looking for that next mouse. The cat likes to lay in your lap,purring loudly as if there was only that. That is why life is nice,when your only a cat. - Raz Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dezdimona Posted October 6, 2008 Share Posted October 6, 2008 ha ha...that one made me smile from ear to ear! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DracoRazgriz Posted October 7, 2008 Author Share Posted October 7, 2008 from the silly to the spiritual Soundless Light A white light bathing you in warmth and compassion. Bringing you in closer to the feeling of blissful joy as you become one and nothingness. Joyous singing of the harmonious nector of living in the psalm. Praying to become all that transforms into the Soundless Light. - Raz OT> about that last poem, what can I say we all love our pets. :rolleyes: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dezdimona Posted October 7, 2008 Share Posted October 7, 2008 beautiful Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DracoRazgriz Posted October 16, 2008 Author Share Posted October 16, 2008 Here's another one I wrote a while back. Endless Nights Stars Streaking,noises blaring on these endless nights. Hospitals caring,babies crying on these endless nights. Dogs barking,cats meowing on these endless nights. Priest's praying,people playing on these endless nights. Children singing,bells a ringing on those endless nights. - Raz Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dezdimona Posted October 16, 2008 Share Posted October 16, 2008 I really like the last one! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DracoRazgriz Posted October 16, 2008 Author Share Posted October 16, 2008 It was the first poem I wrote outside of class and as a hobby, so I consider it to be VERY disjointed and not very good but I do like that last verse as well. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dezdimona Posted October 16, 2008 Share Posted October 16, 2008 It was the first poem I wrote outside of class and as a hobby, so I consider it to be VERY disjointed and not very good but I do like that last verse as well.some of my poems are dis-jointed also,I have a tendacy to be a non-comformist,but I always rejoin the stanza's later in the poem Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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