Faith

[Pack Rat]

Yea I know, I really began to enjoy writing poetry :P Hope you like this one too.

 

Faith

 

Preached by His son, brought forth by the twelve

His children hunted, their blood marked the dust

Their faith did not linger, their heads raised to the sky...

 

Tides changed, Ages passed

Now the Book remains closed, no longer is the blood being repaid

Forgotten are His words, His son no more but a tale...

 

As moon and sun pass by, their ends draw near

Fear fills their hearts, not knowing what to come

Seeking a hole, seeking an escape from the maze.

They seek redemption

 

To who do they turn?

 

The poem goes about something that is more frequent the last years. Many people lose their faith in puberty but when their time has come, they all of a sudden turn back to their faith. I find that a bit hypocrite.

 

I'm sure Malchik will point out any grammar mistakes I made since I dont speak english myself :P

[Hooded]

Wow nice And dark new rpg ?? sounds like a story to :nazgul: & :shifty:

[Malchik]

Your English is good PR so I think you can speak it. I know that it's not your first language.

 

Three points of grammar

one - 'his son but a tale' or 'his son no more than a tale' either would do.

two - 'not knowing what's (i.e. what is) to come' or 'not knowing what may come'

three - 'to whom do they turn'.

 

The poem is Christian based. Do those of other faiths have the same doubts in their teen years?

 

BTW it is not hypocritical to return to beliefs if you then adjust your life to show you are a true believer - atoning for sins, giving money to the poor and needy etc. It is hypocritical if it is done as a kind of insurance policy and at no personal inconvenience!