the girl part 3

[reaper13]

(Wildfire send a letter to rosethorn hall telling shade that he’d be late getting back. Him and Alexis rented a room at the merchants inn. Wildfire was patching up the holes in his armor when Alexis walks in with dinner)

 

“Wildfire I saved you some dinner. I hope you like chicken….oh am I interrupting anything?”. Wildfire was wearing only his black jeans. “ no I’m just trying to fix this piece of junk” he said , clearly frustrated, while trying to remove an arrowhead stuck in the shoulder blade of his battle suit.

 

“take a break and come eat”. wildfire, not wanting to argue, put down his armor and pliers and sat at the table. It was then that Alexis noticed something on his chest.

 

“What happened to you?” Alexis asked a little worried. “what?” wildfire that was her eyes were looking at his right shoulder. There was a scar in the shape of a circle about two centimeters wide. Wildfire grabbed Alexis’s hand and traced a circle on the back of his right shoulder.

 

Alexis saw the same scar on the back of his shoulder. “ It was one of the first jobs I took with your….’mother’. Someone got behind her and threw a javelin at her…. If it hit her it would kill her. I couldn’t let that happen” Alexis was stunned. “did…did it hurt?” “Even though it healed in around two hours sometimes it still fells sore. But I couldn’t lose her again.”

 

Alexis then noticed the rest of his back and chest. They were full of scars. “Did they all hurt?” “….every one. I’m just glad you didn’t need to feel the pain that my past causes me.”

 

“That’s….not true.” now it was wildfire’s turn to be surprised. “ I guess I should explain. I remember I was living with a family years ago. The father was a drug addict. He got involved with the wrong people. He sold me to some slavers” Alexis was clearly upset. “I was….abused daily. Then one day I heard that a girl was worked to death. She was a….close friend. When I heard that something woke up in me. I was sitting by a candle. When I slammed my fist on the desk the flame almost exploded. That day I learned I could control fire.”

 

Wildfire’s fist was shaking. He stood up and went over to the nightstand by his bed and grabbed the heartbreaker. “don’t waste you time” Alexis told him. Wildfire’s hand stopped inches from the doorknob. ”Why?” “ Seven days latter I made my move. The camp was incinerated. I mad sure that the slave master felt all the pain that he caused. His screams told my that I accomplished my goal. I burned off all of his fingers and burned through all of his tendons. The black horse courier said that the cause of death was third degree burns over 100% of his body. The camp is just a scar on the ground.

 

“Alexis….I don’t know what to say…except I’m sorry I wasn’t there to protect you “ “you didn’t even know I was alive” this cut wildfire deeper than any blade. Alexis could tell. “I’m sorry I didn’t mean it like that.” ”….I know….I’m going for a run. I’ll be back soon.” before she could say anything he was out the door.

[dezdimona]

edit:

(Wildfire sent a letter to rosethorn hall telling shade that he’d be late getting back. He and Alexis had rented a room at the merchants inn. Wildfire was patching up the holes in his armor when Alexis walks in with dinner)

 

“Wildfire I saved you some dinner. I hope you like chicken….oh am I interrupting anything?”. Wildfire was wearing only his black jeans.

“ No I’m just trying to fix this piece of junk” he said , clearly frustrated, while trying to remove an arrowhead stuck in the shoulder blade of his battle suit.

 

“Take a break and come eat”.

Wildfire, not wanting to argue, put down his armor and pliers and sat at the table. It was then that Alexis noticed something on his chest.

 

“What happened to you?” Alexis asked a little worried.

“What?” (wildfire that was her eyes were looking at his right shoulder). There was a scar in the shape of a circle about two centimeters wide. Wildfire grabbed Alexis’s hand and traced a circle on the back of his right shoulder.

 

Rewrite the above paragraph,it's not written correctly!

 

Alexis saw the same scar on the back of his shoulder.

“ It was one of the first jobs I took with your….’mother’. Someone got behind her and threw a javelin at her…. If ithad hit her it would killed her. I couldn’t let that happen”

Alexis was stunned. “did…did it hurt?”

“Even though it healed in around two hours sometimes it still fells sore. But I couldn’t lose her again.”

 

Alexis then noticed the rest of his back and chest. They were full of scars. “Did they all hurt?” “

….every one. I’m just glad you didn’t need to feel the pain that my past causes me.”

 

“That’s….not true.” now it was wildfire’s turn to be surprised. “ I guess I should explain. I remember I was living with a family years ago. The father was a drug addict. He got involved with the wrong people. He sold me to some slavers” Alexis was clearly upset. “I was….abused daily. Then one day I heard that a girl was worked to death. She was a….close friend. When I heard that something woke up in me. I was sitting by a candle. When I slammed my fist on the desk the flame almost exploded. That day I learned I could control fire.”

 

Wildfire’s fist was shaking. He stood up and went over to the nightstand by his bed and grabbed the heartbreaker

. “don’t waste you time” Alexis told him.

 

Wildfire’s hand stopped inches from the doorknob. ”Why?” “ Seven days latter I made my move.

 

The camp was incinerated. I mad sure that the slave master felt all the pain that he caused. His screams told my that I accomplished my goal. I burned off all of his fingers and burned through all of his tendons. The black horse courier said that the cause of death was third degree burns over 100% of his body. The camp is just a scar on the ground.

 

“Alexis….I don’t know what to say…except I’m sorry I wasn’t there to protect you

 

“ “you didn’t even know I was alive” this cut wildfire deeper than any blade.

 

Alexis could tell. “I’m sorry I didn’t mean it like that.” ”….I know….I’m going for a run. I’ll be back soon.” before she could say anything he was out the door.

 

better,the story is coming along very nicely...work on polishing it up!...good job!

[pedantic]

Not wishing to add to dezi's comments, I will only say.

 

I hope you stitch this all together when you're done, it's a pretty good read so far. :thumbsup: