saadus

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It got quiet.... :unsure:

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Good luck K00L. :thumbsup:

Night K00L. Meanwhile, I win. :thumbsup:

uurgghh. Work work work work work. Seems like all I ever do :tongue: At least I won't have the computer for 3 weeks :unsure: Anyone have tips for painting?

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Okay, so I wrote this story quite a while ago and put a link in my signature to advertise my book. Here is a quick excerpt. I did the period thing so it would indent right. Here is a link to see the book. Please some sort of feedback would be greatly appreciated. This is intended to be my practice series before I start working on the book I plan on publishing again.

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first off some tips to help separate the dialogue. Anytime you go into dialogue, try something like this. You will be told by any author or English instructor this is the best way to do that. It cleans up the paragraphs as well. Always indent. When working in Microsoft office or Open Office, press tab in front of any new paragraph or dialogue line. I used five spaces as I don't think tab works on the Nexus. I will be happy to help more in that regard later. In the meantime remember, it is your story. Don't worry if nobody else may like it, just make sure you like it and it makes sense. Cover all those possible plot holes and make sure you know what direction the story is going. Trust me, it sucks to rewrite an entire book because you found a plot hole. Good luck with writing the book :thumbsup: It sounds like a good concept from what I read already. :EDIT: It didn't take the five spaces either XD.

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Saadus hires all the geniuses in the world to work on a machine that can bring fictional characters to life. After it is completed, Saadus brings forth James Hollin and all the main characters out of the Risen novel and charges at the hill, overwhelming Vyper with sheer numbers. Saadus locks Vyper up in a cage and tears down the Cobra flag. "I own the hill now." Saadus claims.

Saadus was the name of the villain of the first book I ever wrote. I was 12 XD and the book was never finished passed page 23. But the name just sort of stuck so I keep it.

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