Zephyr2011 Posted March 22, 2009 Share Posted March 22, 2009 So I, Zeph, in my aspiring musical ambitions, have written a song, a song about the girl I love/like(whatever you want to call it depending on how mature you are). I'm not satisfied with it and it's definitely not finished yet, but I'd like some suggestions on lyrics, it'll be accompanied atleast by my guitar, possibly also a drumset and second guitar or a bass guitar (this is a more layed back piece , not heavy metal though. Think The Beatles) I got a girl on my mind,She's off for a while,Went down Florida for a spellI hope she's well. The girl with the long hair,The green eyesAnd the pretty faceFlew down there. She won't have meBut I still love herI hope she'll seeHow happy we could beTogether. The girl with the long hair,The green eyesAnd the pretty face,And me. I miss her dearlyEv'ry Day and Night,Losin' sleepThinking about her,How I wish she were here.I wonder if she thinks of me,I don't know,But I hope so. The girl with the long hair,The green eyesAnd the pretty face.How I miss her. That's all that I've written so far, believe me It's changed a LOT since I first dreamed it up. Please post your thoughts, feelings, advice suggestions etc. Much appreciated. -The Nexus's Broken hearted musician, Zeph Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dezdimona Posted March 22, 2009 Share Posted March 22, 2009 touching and heartfelt. Love and emotion have a way of bringing out true feelings,even when unreturned. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Zephyr2011 Posted March 22, 2009 Author Share Posted March 22, 2009 Thanks dezi that means a lot to me. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Zephyr2011 Posted March 23, 2009 Author Share Posted March 23, 2009 I added a bit to it, trying to decide what chord progression to use for the guitar. I got a girl on my mind,She's off for a while,Went down Florida for a spellI hope she's well. The girl with the long hair,The green eyesAnd the pretty faceFlew down there. She won't have meBut I still love herI hope she'll seeHow happy we could beTogether. The girl with the long hair,The green eyesAnd the pretty face,And me. I miss her dearlyEv'ry Day and Night,Losin' sleepThinking about her,How I wish she were here.I wonder if she thinks of me,I don't know,But I hope so. The girl with the long hair,The green eyesAnd the pretty face.How I miss her. She'll be back soon,Not soon enough.But I suppose all good thingsAre worth waiting forAnd she's one of them.As the days go byI miss her more. The girl with the long hair,The green eyesAnd the pretty faceWho won't have me. Maybe she does love meI don't knowBut I hope so,How wonderful that would be,I can't imagine.I hope my thoughts are true,Instead of leaving me blue,When she returns. The girl with the long hair,The green eyesAnd the pretty faceMaybe she will take me. Funny how time goes,The closer it is untilSomething you want is givenThe longer the days go by.Maybe she'd give us a try,Maybe she'd say no again,I don't care, I just want to seeher once more. The girl with the long hair,The green eyesAnd the pretty face,I want to see her again. Yes, the girl with the long hair,The green eyes And the pretty face,I can't wait to see herOnce more.Weather it be for good or ill.I just need to see her.Or I swear I'll lose my mind. For the girl with the long hair,The green eyesAnd the pretty face. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Storm Raven Posted March 23, 2009 Share Posted March 23, 2009 This is very nice, Do you have the equipment to record the audio? I'd love to hear how this sounds... Storm Raven Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Zephyr2011 Posted March 23, 2009 Author Share Posted March 23, 2009 I can record the guitar (my sound card has a jack for an input cable compatable with a guitar's) but I need to buy a mic for the vocals. And I *still* can't decide what the chord progression should be. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Arcelas Posted March 23, 2009 Share Posted March 23, 2009 It's awesome! BTW I'm singing it now...I have a thing for music it just comes to me all of a sudden.But I cana wait to hear you sing it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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