xstrikexhardx Posted January 7, 2014 Share Posted January 7, 2014 Hi guys I wrote a short skyrim fan fiction about my player character who is an argonian searching for fortune and statusAny feedback would be appreciated thanks.http://goo.gl/zin9Kx http://psychictandemwarelephants.files.wordpress.com/2014/01/havokbegins1.png Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JoArgo Posted January 7, 2014 Share Posted January 7, 2014 Hey im not a big fan of Argonians but hey, this was one hell of a good story, ill save the page to my favoties in case you decide to add to the story, great work Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
xstrikexhardx Posted January 7, 2014 Author Share Posted January 7, 2014 Thanks man I appreciate it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bben46 Posted January 7, 2014 Share Posted January 7, 2014 You may want to put this into the Discussions>Druids garden section, There are other stories there. Not a bad start. It could use some editing. Repetitious use of the same word in succeeding sentences is one thing I picked up right away. Try to find a synonym. There is a lot of descriptive imagery here, :thumbsup: in some places maybe a bit too long winded though. One trick is to read descriptive sections out loud and see how they scan. This will help with over long sentences. I have that problem when describing things also. Keep writing. I'll be watching for the next episode. :D Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
xstrikexhardx Posted January 9, 2014 Author Share Posted January 9, 2014 Thanks I will keep that in mind when i work on part 2. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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