katashy Posted December 18, 2009 Author Share Posted December 18, 2009 @ Uncle Roe, I know. I came up with the name when playing a bit of Halo. The "Hell Jumpers" were in Halo, and I liked the name. But I decided to change it so I'm not just copying it. I got confused. :P @Maharg, Whatever you want them too. I wrote it as a short story and didn't really think about that. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Germandeathkittiez Posted December 19, 2009 Share Posted December 19, 2009 I liked how you kept rounding back to "It's been two weeks since the infection started..." I thought it was really clever the way it was written and it helped keep the pace of this little prologue. If you were to continue it in a longer story, I would suggest keeping that pattern throughout the entire story. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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