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Winter Heart - Poem


Rheyne

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You guys like the picture? I took it on a random adventure last September. It's in Moundville..or roundabouts...a place up the highway from my house. :)
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Rheyne, love your poem and you are indeed a poet.

 

A poet is simply a person who writes poems. You need not prove yourself to yourself or others to be a poet.

 

I will reread your poem more than once and enjoy doing so.

 

Interesting and well written poem, Keanumoreira.

 

Greetings, ranokoa!!! Pleased to meet you.

 

Haha! You raise a valid point sir, I bow to your logic. :-)

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You guys like the picture? I took it on a random adventure last September. It's in Moundville..or roundabouts...a place up the highway from my house. :)

 

(Thanks for that previous quote.) :happy:

 

Yes I do like that picture, it is very tranquil. Must be beautyful up where you live.

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I agree, it is good. But I.M.O. it had further potential. EDIT: I think punctuation would have fitted this well to insinuate pause on some lines. Still, it's good.

 

Be well, sleep well, fight well, live long.

~Ranokoa

 

any better? i added punctuation and some spacing.

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The day.

 

Sleeping.. in her arms,

Catch your breath. Stop.

 

Night air.

Frozen to the bone, chilled

Stand alone and find...

 

Winter.

Open all your fears, to face

Soft and latent regret.

 

First glance.

She is solid,

Eyes blue pools.

 

Sleeping.. in your arms

 

Very touching. This is the heart of a poet.

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The day.

 

Sleeping.. in her arms,

Catch your breath. Stop.

 

Night air.

Frozen to the bone, chilled

Stand alone and find...

 

Winter.

Open all your fears, to face

Soft and latent regret.

 

First glance.

She is solid,

Eyes blue pools.

 

Sleeping.. in your arms

 

Very touching. This is the heart of a poet.

 

::blush:: Thank you very much. I'm so glad it gave you a nice response. This poem was written in Ommwriter, it's this program that I think is still in beta..anyway. There are really relaxing sounds against a simple background with a calming scene. Makes it very easy to be inspired, as I am one of those people that thinks a blank page is sad until filled with thoughts or stories or pictures. ^_^

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I'm freezing to death if I read this good poem again.

I have goose pimples allover my skin.

Got to get me a pullover if I want to read theses 'chilling' thoughts again.

 

(*head shaking* It is summer and I'm searching fro a pullover to read a poem.)

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