The last Miserable Moon lit Night

[Deleted54170User]

Re-Write is now further along the order of posts.  As I found editing a post has shown me it can add html characters that mess it up.  Even more then I can while trying to sharpen my skill.<br><br>It is a short story with a purpose...to help me understand the rudimentary writing skills I am learning.<br><br>I wrote it to honor the <a href="http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Lon_Chaney,_Jr.">Actor Lon Chaney, Jr.</a> who I remember, because a fellow who I knew let me visit one Friday evening to watch television.  Oh!  We had a television at the house, but his family had a different station then ours could get.<br><br>I only regret I had not known the new school mate as well as I should have liked first before seeing the movie at his house.  After seeing the movie, "The Wolfman" I had to walk 3 miles home, 'alone' after midnight.<br><br>The Wolfman was filmed when movies were still in black and white film.<br>

[TheCalliton]

perhaps you should place these in the druid's garden section

[VesemirTheWitcher]

Calliton's right...

[AliasTheory]

I will read this later when I have time. In the meantime I would suggest these be moved to the Garden as before mentioned, especially since your thread will get lost in the sea of posting game threads. ;)

 

Through a brief glance of this I think some more sentence structure variety may be in order. I'm sure it is solid nonetheless.

[Deleted54170User]

Yes! I see now it has a need for a bit more detail. Will reread, rewrite, and put in where all of you recommend. Thx :thumbsup:

[martinthemage]

Very descriptive, well done. But I think it is very hard to read the letter in the way you wrote it. At some points I didn't have a clue what it was saying. Also you should put more commas In places to make it easier to read and vary the sentence structure a bit more. Other than that, the description really made me feel like I was in that world. Great work!

[Deleted54170User]

Moved to a better place.

 

 

 

 

 

Had too!