Purplesurge Posted May 4, 2012 Share Posted May 4, 2012 (edited) The Beginning of the EndMy icebound shackles clung against the metal cage that has imprisoned me for the past year. My end is near, the last feelings of regret and remorse swelled within me. Nord blood is the only thing that is running through my veins, keeping me from freezing to my core. The dragging of the executioner’s keen axe rung throughout the vast and snowy mountainside alarming everyone of my fellow prisoners. All of the captives around me made their final wishes and prayers to Sovngarde. The scrawny prison guard pulled out his keys with a shaken grasp, slowly unlocking all the cells until they all were open. “Everyone out!” the executioner spoke with a harrowing boom. The group of people gradually crawled out of the lined up cages, with their last trace of energy. Taking only their prayer books with them. “Move Nord!” the prison guard bellowed. With only my shackles and tattered cloth I advanced through the shallow cage door. The only sound to be heard was the grotesque sound of heads being hacked off. I was lost in a combination of guilt and remorse, I had drown myself in these feelings only to lose time while my fellow prisoners met their demise. “Don’t make me call you again….Nord” the executioner growled with contempt. At that, a heavy shaft collided with my back giving enough force to propel me onto the blood soaked stump. With my final prayers to Sovngarde I accepted my death. With my face down on the stump, I heard the sound of the executioner heave. ======================================================================================================================================================================== Thanks for reading guys, I started writing this the other day and felt like I should share it, if people like it ill keep writing. Here's the link to my blog that the writing will be up on first. http://skyrimdeliverance.tumblr.com/ Edited May 4, 2012 by Purplesurge Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MorwynKelm Posted May 4, 2012 Share Posted May 4, 2012 Sorry, all I can hear are banjos. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Purplesurge Posted May 4, 2012 Author Share Posted May 4, 2012 Sorry, all I can hear are banjos.What is that supposed to mean? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
SubjectProphet Posted May 4, 2012 Share Posted May 4, 2012 Not bad. Consider heading to the Druid's garden, you'll get feedback from other story writers. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MorwynKelm Posted May 4, 2012 Share Posted May 4, 2012 Funny thing is, I could see the whole "squeal like a pig" thing happening in Skyrim. I'm guessing it'd involve Nords. Now there's a mod idea. Sorry to derail your thread, but you can't call it Deliverance and not get the ... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Purplesurge Posted May 4, 2012 Author Share Posted May 4, 2012 Thank you, haha im only 15 and im aspiring to become a writer, once i build my vocabulary a lot better Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MorwynKelm Posted May 4, 2012 Share Posted May 4, 2012 15, you say? Kudos for being able to put a well-made series of sentences together. It's more than I see most of your peers doing these days. Keep it up. And really, don't ever see Deliverance, although it is a better love story than Twilight... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Purplesurge Posted May 4, 2012 Author Share Posted May 4, 2012 Haha thank you :) anywhere better you can think of that i can post my story? tumblr sucks Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
MorwynKelm Posted May 4, 2012 Share Posted May 4, 2012 I think "story" is a misnomer here. If you want to blow it out into something fuller, maybe go into some detail about your surroundings, the emotional hurricane a person would be experiencing, the thoughts, memories? Is he trembling? Stoic? Any spectators? Seems to me that a LOT would be going on those very few moments, anyone in that situation would likely want to take it all in. Describe it. Put your neck on the line and imagine what that would feel like... Seems to me that there's a lot that could be said. I've read a book about famous (and imagined) decapitations. If you're looking for additional inspiration, I highly recommend Severance - http://www.amazon.com/Severance-Stories-Robert-Olen-Butler/dp/0811856143 Good luck to you. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Purplesurge Posted May 4, 2012 Author Share Posted May 4, 2012 I think "story" is a misnomer here. If you want to blow it out into something fuller, maybe go into some detail about your surroundings, the emotional hurricane a person would be experiencing, the thoughts, memories? Is he trembling? Stoic? Any spectators? Seems to me that a LOT would be going on those very few moments, anyone in that situation would likely want to take it all in. Describe it. Put your neck on the line and imagine what that would feel like... Seems to me that there's a lot that could be said. I've read a book about famous (and imagined) decapitations. If you're looking for additional inspiration, I highly recommend Severance - http://www.amazon.com/Severance-Stories-Robert-Olen-Butler/dp/0811856143 Good luck to you. Sweet thank you :) that helped me out a lot Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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