antonkr Posted November 8, 2009 Share Posted November 8, 2009 Colonel Westrex. USMC. Commander of reinforcment operationSeptember 21 The first time i got into a marine corps and I just knew that it is what i am going to do for my life. To defend my country. I am very pleased that I planned this operation. Right now everything can go wrong Corporal Lancaster USMC Force Recon team leaderSeptember 21 I am more then glad to be here. All of my men on my fire team are ready for this. Even know I did this hundreds of times, I am still affraid. I am affraid, that one of us, eather me or one of my guys, can die here. Its just... kinda... I always feel that way before operation starts. In 2 hours, we will be on our way, on our way , helping those guys who helped us. Wish us good luck. Corporal Fareg USMC. Pilot of crashed MV-22 Date Unknown I can't belive i got into this. I can't belive because of my fault 20 of our guys are dead. I don't know what to do now. I don't even know where i am. I don't know what happend whether I crashed or they shot me down but they are all dead, and if I don't get out of this, it would be my fault of my death. My leg is hurt but i have no time to worry about it now, i just want to see somebody in Marine Corp uniform alive. Fighter third class Asatar. Defence Force guerilla organization.September 19 Its just a funny feeling that something will go wrong. Even know we became allies with Americans, I still never feel safe. Compared to those guys we have worst equipment ever. We captured one of agressors tanks, but noone here knows how to use it. But we are not just a few civilians with guns, we are the first line of defence in here and apperently last oneWe had attacks coming from all directions. All of them... we won, but with a great casulties. We won't stand another attack. I just know it. Why won't those Americans finally sendus reinforcments. We are not just protecting some village, we are protecting a capitall city. If Americans won't show up... we are dead. Civilian name unknownSeptember 10 Its the worst place to be on the war. Being a civilian. More regular people died on this war then soldiers. The worst part we can't do anything about it. Its just the way it is. Civilian police officer, name unknownSeptember 15Maybe its the hardest job in the world to be policeman on the war. They say that there are no laws when country is in war, and they are a basicly right. Its almost impossible to keep the law while this things are going on. Private Cheran Agressors armySeptember 10 I don't know what my team lead is doing. Trying to assault point C is a suicide. That guy is psychoo, but nobody dares to protest him or tell him that it is a stupid idea. Its impossibleto get there. This war is worst idea ever. I just hope we will get out of this s*** soon. ---------------Colonel Westrex. USMC. Commander of reinforcment operationSeptember 22 Operation is going the way we planned. Two force recon squads are going into a city to help protect it. The only thing that can go wrong, is if the guerilla guys will confuse themwith enemy. We have translators in both squads, but still... hope they like us/Corporal Lancaster USMC Force Recon team leaderSeptember 23 Today we got into the city. Suprisingly guerillas were friendly. Even know those guys are not soldiers, it is a big pleasure to fight on their side. Those guys know alot tactics about protecting the city. So far we are just doing what we are told to. Fighter third class Asatar. Defence Force guerilla organization.September 23 Finally American troops arrived. It was the best news i heard all day or maybe all month. Those guys got here in the right time. Now we are expecting more attacks coming in.Those guys are good fighters, but they have no idea about how to protect a city, and they understand that. Lets just hope this will be over soon. Civilian name unknownSeptember 17 Those... Those bastards. They took my children away. All they want is blood. I killed one of them with a knife, but it is not enough. I am going to go out there and kill as manyof them as i can. This is probably my last diary entery. Civilian police officer, name unknownSeptember 17 We had few agressor troops coming into here. They took many people away. One of my guys try to protest. He started shooting troops. He got killed. I knew this guy for 15years. It was just impossible to see him die and see those soldiers laugh. Private Cheran Agressors armySeptember 17 We entered the small village. Our soldiers took some of the civilians and killed them. I can't stand this anymore. --------- Colonel Westrex. USMC. Commander of reinforcment operationSeptember 24Our guys are having extreme casulties. We lost half of our troops. We are going to send a reiforcment squad there, hopefully that will help them out. Corporal Lancaster USMC Force Recon team leaderSeptember 24We are reciving heavy casulties. My force recon team is down and i am the only person to survive. There more and more of them coming. We can't stand the casulties anymore Fighter third class Asatar. Defence Force guerilla organization.September 25City is almost completly taken over. Almost all Americans are dead or wounded. We are getting out of here. We can stand the pressure anymore Civilian name unknownSeptember 23"Killed by agressors in attemp to resque prisoners" Civilian police officer, name unknownSeptember 25I can't stand all blood anymore. We pledged to defend the citizens but we can't do anything at all. Its a terrible feeling. I hate it. Private Cheran Agressors armySeptember 21Our team leader got totall crazy. He shoots every civilian he sees. Its impossible to watch it. I hope that wasn't the reason we attacked them. ------ Colonel Westrex. USMC. Commander of reinforcment operationSeptember 26We cannot defend the city anymore almost all of the guys are dead. I can't belive we made such a cruel miscalucalation. That is all my fault. I can't belive this. Corporal Lancaster USMC Force Recon team leaderSeptember 26 I am hit in the leg and I cannot go anywhere. I am almost out of food and ammo. All of guerillas escaped or are dead I can't stand this anymore. When are they going to pick me up! The only thing i have now is a flare which I am going to use now. Fighter third class Asatar. Defence Force guerilla organization.September 26 All of my guys are dead. I am running away from here. I can't belive this. Its just impossible. I wish I was dead now. WAIT oh my god, I see flare, I hope there somebodyalive there. Civilian police officer, name unknownSeptember 26They have came here. All they are doing is killing innocent people. We can't just stand here and wait untill they kill everyone, we have to do something about it. Private Cheran Agressors armySeptember 26 My fireteam lead is dead. Finally. Everyone voted for me to be the new team lead. We are out of food and water. Now its not about how many you kill, its about how manyof us will survive. We only have 3 people but its good enough. We are now walking through the big city. I see a red flare. Hopefully its something good. Corporal Fareg USMC. Pilot of crashed MV-22 September 26Agressors took me as a prisoner. They are all laughing at me. I think i will be dead in few hours. But I think that is what I deserve. ------------ Colonel Westrex. USMC. Commander of reinforcment operationSeptember 27We still cannot make any comunication with them. I cannot belive it!. I basicly killed the whole fire team!!! Fighter third class Asatar. Defence Force guerilla organization.September 26Its one of USMC guys. He's badly wounded. I can sure help him out, but we won't be able to stay here for long anymore. We need to get out of here and fast. The whole place is dead Corporal Lancaster USMC Force Recon team leaderSeptember 26One of guerillas is helping me out. I sended mayday by radio. I better hope they send us some reinforcment. I see some people over. DAMN those are agressors. Private Cheran Agressors armySeptember 26Maybe we would have ripped each other if we had weapons, but we didn't have ammo. We all decided to keep together. ----------- Colonel Westrex. USMC. Commander of reinforcment operationSeptember 28We finally found them. We are sending helos there as soon as possible, hopefully they are still alive. Corporal Lancaster USMC Force Recon team leaderSeptember 28They finally sent us some reiforcment and the helos are picking us up, But I am not going anywhere without the guys who helped me. I can't just leave them there. Fighter third class Asatar. Defence Force guerilla organization.September 28Americans have some helos there. They picked us up. Why can't we all just die already!! I am tired of pain. Hopefully they will help us. Private Cheran Agressors armySeptember 26American helicopter is here. Lancast, and pilots are arguing about something. I don't think they will take me with them. --------- Colonel Westrex comitted suicide after hearing the number of troops lost Corporal Lancaster lost both of his legs but survived and got a medal. Fighter third class Asatar. Is considered a hero in his country now. Private Cheran was in the military court but was then considered innocent Civilian police officer died after getting in the battle between agressors and civilians Corporal Fareg was killed by agressor troops. After the accident, all three nations declared peace because the price of the war was too high. The endmade by Antonkr.Special thanks to BBen46 for information about US Marine units. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
LordTenaim Posted November 8, 2009 Share Posted November 8, 2009 These already seem intresting characters and you are already getting a wide view point with who and what they are i will be intrested to see what will happen to and with them. I hope that it will work well and that you get a result you as the writer are happy with. :thumbsup: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
antonkr Posted November 8, 2009 Author Share Posted November 8, 2009 Thank you!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ahmadawad Posted November 8, 2009 Share Posted November 8, 2009 Ok man, you know me, I just speak my mind, This is how I see you story: 1- Nice swinging in time (hope you can continue with out mistakes).2- Easy expression which is great for a foreigner like myself.3- Damnn good imagination to look from diffrent angles. (Are you happy ?? :rolleyes: ) 4- A lots of typos which disconcert me from the story flow5- Some lines felt incomplete, maybe you meant it like that, but I did not like it. the story is a good start, it have a nice ... rhythm, so keep it up (if you can :P ) Ahmad Awad, Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
antonkr Posted November 8, 2009 Author Share Posted November 8, 2009 Thank you WSS (thats what i call him on MSN) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
species5478 Posted November 9, 2009 Share Posted November 9, 2009 The various perspectives are interesting. It almost feels like I'm reading a military doc, or notes from a reporter. I think you should keep pushing this no matter how many people comment. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
antonkr Posted November 9, 2009 Author Share Posted November 9, 2009 Colonel Westrex. USMC. Commander of reinforcment operationSeptember 22 Operation is going the way we planned. Two force recon squads are going into a city to help protect it. The only thing that can go wrong, is if the guerilla guys will confuse themwith enemy. We have translators in both squads, but still... hope they like us Corporal Lancaster USMC Force Recon team leaderSeptember 23 Today we got into the city. Suprisingly guerillas were friendly. Even know those guys are not soldiers, it is a big pleasure to fight on their side. Those guys know alot tactics about protecting the city. So far we are just doing what we are told to. Fighter third class Asatar. Defence Force guerilla organization.September 23 Finally American troops arrived. It was the best news i heard all day or maybe all month. Those guys got here in the right time. Now we are expecting more attacks coming in.Those guys are good fighters, but they have no idea about how to protect a city, and they understand that. Lets just hope this will be over soon. Civilian name unknownSeptember 17 Those... Those bastards. They took my children away. All they want is blood. I killed one of them with a knife, but it is not enough. I am going to go out there and kill as manyof them as i can. This is probably my last diary entery. Maybe its the hardest job in the world to be policeman on the war. They say that there are no laws when country is in war, and they are a basicly right. Its almost impossible to keep the law while this things are going on. Civilian police officer, name unknownSeptember 17 We had few agressor troops coming into here. They took many people away. One of my guys try to protest. He started shooting troops. He got killed. I knew this guy for 15years. It was just impossible to see him die and see those soldiers laugh. Private Cheran Agressors armySeptember 17 We entered the small village. Our soldiers took some of the civilians and killed them. I can't stand this anymore.--- Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
antonkr Posted November 23, 2009 Author Share Posted November 23, 2009 Alright the book is all done! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
species5478 Posted December 23, 2009 Share Posted December 23, 2009 Good read. Brings back memories. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Herculine Posted December 25, 2009 Share Posted December 25, 2009 I hope to see more of this. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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