Pushkatu Posted March 2, 2010 Share Posted March 2, 2010 The stench woke me up. I must have been unconcious for many hours as I feel my legs numb and the terrible pain around my joints is unbearable. I cannot see, but I hear groans all around me. I know I'm not alone, there are others to, all chained just like me. I can hear the noise their chains make. I try to remember how I got here, but every time I try to think about it, my mind blocks and pain becomes even more intense. Again that terrible stench! It turns everything inside me upside down. How long am I going to stay here? If only I could remember something about my past, mayby later, if there will be one, that is... I don't even remember how I look, my face!! I feel so tired and thirsty. If only I could fall asleep and never wake up again. Someone next to me started to cry. I think it's a woman. I tryed to say something, but every time I try to move my tongue the pain makes it imposible to articulate any words, so I gave up. Who did this to us and why? I asked myself this quetion so many times in my head as I become more and more irritated. Why me? I feel a heat wave through my body and it burns me. My eyes burn to and so do my lips, the air I breath burns me inside and I become furious. I try to release myslef from the chains, not giving a damn about the pain anymore and I try to scream, but no sounds come out of my mouth. I have no power left in me. I can't even open my eyes After the spasm I've just been through I cannot feel my arms and legs, it's like I'm floating, the pain is gone, I'm free..... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Maharg67 Posted March 9, 2010 Share Posted March 9, 2010 Interesting! Freedom through death, the final escape? I will read this again. Very good. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
shadowmadnezz Posted March 10, 2010 Share Posted March 10, 2010 creepy :thumbsup: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Pushkatu Posted March 10, 2010 Author Share Posted March 10, 2010 Thanks guys. It took me 10 mins to write this. It was like a flash, a short time after I woke up that morning. I have no experience with writing and such so I have no idea if it's good, but anyway I felt like posting it here, just like a thought you like to preserve and you type it down in a notebook. It was a wierd morning that one. :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
shadowmadnezz Posted March 10, 2010 Share Posted March 10, 2010 Don't Lie Pushkatu u know u got the idea from True blood :whistling: lol Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Pushkatu Posted March 11, 2010 Author Share Posted March 11, 2010 Don't Lie Pushkatu u know u got the idea from True blood :whistling: lol Well... I have not idea what's True blood?! :whistling: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Keanumoreira Posted May 13, 2010 Share Posted May 13, 2010 As a writer myself, I see much potential in your writing. Keep up the good work, and oneday, if you really want to, you'll be a master writer; all it takes is practice. :thumbsup: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Alkser Posted May 13, 2010 Share Posted May 13, 2010 Wow this is so interesting. Good work man Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Pushkatu Posted May 26, 2010 Author Share Posted May 26, 2010 I totaly forgot about this. Thanks for the nice comments guys! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Fifoo Posted June 13, 2010 Share Posted June 13, 2010 Lots of potential in you, Pushkatu, have you written any other passages? :thumbsup: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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