Give Mercy or Corrupt thy soul.

[Flintlockecole]

"Twenty year's I've been waiting for this day you betraying bastard" Lord Tripp scream's at Renoit who stares at him with a grin on his cold dead face. "You've lost your friend's, the last of you family and lied, LIED to all that followed you" Renoit say's with a rather delighted smile "What do you think they'll do when they find out? Praise you as a hero, naw they'll gut you like a fish that's what". "Draw that blade of your's" said the Lord Tripp. Renoit draw's his blade with delight and cries "I've already won!" Tripp and his foe clash with no end in sight. "I see old age is starting to get to you Ray" say's Renoit as the Lord start's to lose zeal in his assualt. With one final swing Renoit shatter's the Royal Sorrow that Lord Tripp has been brandishing and slices his leg right open "Ugh!" Lord Tripp scream's. Most of his blade is intact as he is knelt down in what seem's to be defeat. Ray whisper's a prayer of forgiveness to the one he lost so long ago "I join the devil tonight for dinner, I am so sorry...". "I'm taking you with me!" He scream's as he swing's his broken blade around shattering his foes blade and inflicting a fatal wound upon his gut. He kick's the shattered and defeated blade aside to deal the Coup de Grace. Ray look's down and relishes upon this moment "Twenty year's I've been waiting to kill you, TWENTY DAMNED YEARS" He scream's with vigor. Raising his blade up to do the deed a blood curdling voice yell's "Don't do it god damn it!". "Is that you Master Cyan" Lord Tripp question's the burned figure as the mortally wounded Renoit mock's Lord Tripp with a taunt "You...ve lost al...ready I'll see you... in hell soon enough" as he spit's blood. "Drop that blade Ray" Cyan say's with digust in his eyes "Everything you've done has been folly, If you strike him down all their blood and expecially the lady's blood will be upon your hand's". Ray grip's his cracked blade and question's Cyan "Why shouldn't I deal justice upon this worm! Hes destroyed EVERYTHING! If I can't judge him when who can?!" "It's not your hand that can call justice upon Him" Cyan say's with frusteration "Your too hard headed..." Cyan fall's to the ground dead. "I've tortured..... Hi...m for eight yea...r's and I coul...d't break his....will." Renoit declares with pleasure. "If I can't deal justice upon thee...." Ray say's as he pick's his broken foe from the ground. "I guess nature and fortyfive hundred screaming soul's should then" He say's as he walk's toward's the cliff.

 

That's it for that. Tell me whatcha think.

[Maharg67]

Generally liked it but suggest you break up the big block of writing to make the writing 'easier to digest'.

[Flintlockecole]

I just copy/pasted that from my script lol, I should break it up. In otherword's I'm bad at breaking stuff up Edited May 19, 2011 by Flintlockecole