EPIC OF FATES: STORY OF STORIES

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Edited August 18, 2012 by Maharg67

[Maharg67]

0022: Of Lucky Eddie and the Whirla of Fate #22

 

The big man gave Lucky Eddie a hard look, shook his head in wonder and then spoke. “Commander Alhomer is my rank. Once I led a whole Imperial Legion. I suggest you show me more respect, boy.”

 

Lucky Eddie frowned softly. “People have to earn respect by showing respect to others.”

 

The officer gave the metahuman a sharp look. “If your people are as advanced, technologically speaking, as Matrina have indicated, then you need only teach us things that will allow us to further the cause and to defeat our enemies. I wonder if this is the real reason that the Great Divine led us here, that is to meet you.”

 

Lucky Eddie was obviously puzzled. “The Great Divine?”

 

“That which is behind all of the Divines and which influences the better of the Grand Daedra and other deities, the Godhood of the Light.” Alhomer responded. “Matrina knows more of such things than I do. She is a priestess in the Order of the Great Divine.”

 

The metahuman stood up and stretched. “To gain the Whirl of Fate is not going to be so straight forward. I will need to return to the LevaValkiRuna alone. I can teleport to any place that I have physically been to.” There was more to his teleportation abilities than that but of that he was not willing to speak. He wanted to be alone so as to do some exploring away from these Great Divine following Constitutionalists and to have some space to think. “I can more easily teleport, using less energies, if I am alone.”

 

He materialized some items with fategamecredit, some for the group and some for himself. He slipped his backpack on that he had materialized for himself. It was packed with useful items and now he also had a quasimagical longsword, shortsword, dagger and two non quasimagical knives. He also wore quasimagical leather body-armor.

 

Alhomer was not friendly at all. That is unlike Matrina, and Cathidra, who both liked Lucky Eddie.

 

Alhomer frowned. “We really can not let you go anywhere. You are too valuable to the Cause. You have much knowledge we could use in taking over the Empire and bringing to it a great new Age of Reformation. It will be a world of great knowledge, of wise spiritual guidance and wondrous new technologies. Of course you will have to give us the Whirl of Fate.”

 

Lucky Eddie studied Alhomer carefully, taking in every detail. “No, there is no way I am going to give you an artifact of so much power that it, I heavily suspect, caused something terrible to happen in the Aldmeri Cavecity of LevaValkiRuna and to the peoples in it, both Aldmer and Raymar. Nor could I. I am bound to service and that is not to your cause.”

 

Matrina stood up and frowned hard at Alhomer. “You are but one of three leaders of this expedition but you act, too often, as if you are its one and only one. Lucky Eddie will do what he will do.”

 

Clearly there was a power struggle going on in the expeditionary group. Cathidra looked troubled but also determined and stood up beside Matrina as if to support her. Two others stood next to Alhomer, as if to show they were supporting him, but most of the group seemed undecided to who they would follow or be allied to. Yet Lucky Eddie was nagged by a feeling that not all was all it seemed, that he was missing something important; it was a feeling that had been growing stronger over time.

 

Lucky Eddie vanished with a sparkling shimmer but he did not end up at the expected place.

Edited August 21, 2012 by Maharg67

[Maharg67]

0023: Of Lucky Eddie and the Whirla of Fate #23

 

Lucky Eddie arrived not in the small cave chamber, the one he remembered visiting with the smaller group, but in a vast dome shaped chamber. It was a great black domechamber with mighty golden statues dotting the outer boundary along with golden archways filled with big metallic black double doors. There were eight such doorways, each with its archway, and between each was a golden statue of some exotically beautiful or exotically ugly figure. In the centre of the great domechamber was a great black wheel, horizontal, with golden emblems, embellishments and other features of the same material. It was like some vast gaming wheel.

 

Light seemed to come from the very air itself and there were no shadows, causing an odd effect on everything seen.

 

=- There, before you, is an actual Fategame Wheel of Random Chance. It is far more than it appears, despite that it looks fantastic in nature, and for now it is beyond your use. Hopefully one day you will return here to spin that wheel. For now you need to focus on finding something else in the chamber, a clue or an item or both or something else. I wish I had more to tell you.

 

Then he saw the body, curled up on the floor, enclosed in the same kind of hardened green substance that the Raymar had been, along with their possessions. The body was very small when compared to the relative vastness of the chamber. Curious, and yet with some trepidation, he made his way over the great black floor until he got to the figure. It was much closer to the great wheel but so large was the domechamber that it was still a large distance between the body and the wheel.

 

It was a young woman, a Mer, perhaps an Aldmer, in exotic quasimagical body-armor. She was shorter, slimmer, than Lucky Eddie and darker of skin. Next to her was an exotic armored backpack, a silver metallic trident ending in a longer, sharp central point and two shorter blunt points that he guessed were some kind of projectile weapons.

 

=- She is not dead! At least that is what my sensors, scanners, strongly indicate. Perhaps those Raymar, also in green substance but in that big cavern, are not dead either. Perhaps they have been preserved and you might be able to free them.

 

He wondered how he could revive, free her from the green substance. Then it came to him. A fategame-point would do the trick. Or would it?

 

= You have earned a spinling, 2,000 fategamecredit and five fategame-points. You need to utilize 1,000 fategamecredit and one fategame-point to free the woman from the Preserving Jadei that preserves, imprisons and protects. Just because you free her does not mean that she will be your friend or ally. She may attack you and as a Mer she may have some nasty tricks up her 'sleeves'.

 

LE Trouble is I need more information and she might just have it. Another difficulty is that as much as she is protected, there seem to be some very powerful forces around her, I can 'sense' them, and I wonder just how safe she really is. Not that I really feel... you know... she is just a girl.

 

=- A woman and if she really is Mer, they being longer lived than humans, than she may be very old by human standards and much more so by metahuman standards.

 

LE Old, you mean like twenty years old or something like that?

 

=- No, I mean like a hundred or something like that. Oh, sweetie, you really have been kept in the dark about so much, haven't you?

[Maharg67]

0024: Of Lucky Eddie and the Whirla of Fate #24

 

After she was revived, the green substance gone, the Mer woman sat on the floor trying to get her bearings. She studied Lucky Eddie, looked around at the great domechamber, and then back at him. “What are you doing in Aldmer Territories, stranger?”

 

“Not Aldmer but of much more ancient ways than that, as far as I can see.” Lucky Eddie looked around himself. “No, not even the Aldmer could claim a place like this. The subtle feel of vast age, of vast power, runs all through this place.”

 

She frowned. “How can you, a mere human, know that?” Then she saw the rings on his fingers. “Oh, a fategame-player. That makes a big difference. Only the Chosen Ones can be fategame-players. I will return to the city proper, which is centered on these 'vastly ancient' chambers, as you put it. I wonder why you came to meet me, odd smelling one, when it should have been my people. Since the Mer control all of Tamriel, you must be....” Then she shook her head and seemed concerned. “Something does not feel right, not right at all. I must go to my people as soon as I can.”

 

Lucky Eddie arched his eyebrows. “The Aldmer of LevaValkiRuna?”

 

“The vulgar name for our great cavecity but yes, LevaValkiRuna. What else would I mean? You smell odd and your smell is suppressed. What are you? You are human but not human. Have my people created you from an inferior human?” She slowly stood up, picking up and putting on her backpack. “My people have wondrous knowledge and technologies by I have not heard of that happening. We are grandly advanced even for the Aldmer.”

 

“I am from another world, a world dominated by humans.” Lucky Eddie did not like to say what he was going to say. “The city is abandoned and has been so for a very very long time. Tamriel is largely dominated by an empire run by humans. The Aldmer have vanished from Tamriel, at least as far as I have known, though not altogether. I do not know where else the Aldmer continue to exist. Other Mer Peoples arose from the Aldmer such as the Ayleid, the Bosmer, the Altmer, the Dunmer and others. Oh, yes, the Dwemer. The Ayleid rose and fell as a series of Kingdoms. The Dwemer vanished. A very great deal has happened for many thousands of years have passed since Aldmer thrived in this city. I fear something terrible has happened here.”

 

“Why am I not surprised?” The Aldmer frowned hard, for one of her kind. “One can hope that if some great crisis did happen, as was promising to take place, that many of my people found some way to hide and preserve themselves. There were over a million of them. I was seeking the Whirl of Fate, was caught up in some foolish factional fight and honor tricked into going on a recklessly dangerous mission. By human terms you seem to be about twenty. I am about sixty for we Mer are about three times as long lived as you are, plus about a hundred years, on average.”

 

Lucky Eddie frowned. “I am seven and a half years old but I am a very mature seven and a half years old so don't get any ideas about tricking me or treating me as a child.”

 

The Aldmer studied him hard for a moment and then half smiled before she bowed briefly from the waist. “Clearly you are very mature and wise. Now, we will work together. You have much to tell me and I have much to tell you. Firstly, I have to try to track down my vazgen-atoma, if it is still where I hid it, and hopefully it will be functional. It is a well made vazgen-atoma and much upgraded over the centuries. My family and family-clan, have had it for many centuries. Now, where did I park it?”

 

She picked up her trident weapon and began walking across the domechamber. She made no effort at all to use it on him, to even start to do so. Still he remained wary of her though he tried to hide it.

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You're having fun! You're doing with words what I had a habit of doing with a pencil and started by letting everything begin from a point on a sheet of paper. I dragged the pencil tip away from the point and there appeared a line, which got longer and longer until my mind freed up from the street ordeals and sudden I would stop.

 

I would look at the squiggles and swirls. I could see a path, which began to look like a messy concentric circle until it looked even more familiar to me, a lollipop, or a spinning circle to hypnotize and surprise me.

 

 

You are doing the same thing. Only you are writing words creating what is on your mind and than you see what you see because it explains it for you.

 

There is so much in between I missed because you wrote enough to make sense only for you, because you already know what would fill the gaps in between what I am able to see. You have to fill the gaps in for us readers.

 

You have all the material you need already written down. Now all that material is like the forge with which you're going to pound on some metal to make a ring. Not just any ring a very interesting, not so mysteriously magical, because it is more of a technical wonder.

 

Read over your story and add the parts you hold in your minds memory relating to those you have already written. You know in your mind the parts exist and we readers just need to have those added bits of information added into the gaps you've left because you needed to plant your memories reference points so you can realize the rest of the story and spread the gap and add the words in that reflect what is fitting to go in them.

 

That gap knowlege your present text will assuredly spark your memory each time so you can present what you have yet to describe for the gaps which than will help us readers see more clearly each time what is going on all around the place you are creating from your own life and its realities which you have decided to write in a nice fiction or Sci-Fi to help us understand what tomorrow may bring.

 

Ring! Ring!

 

I need to know more inbetweens.

[Flintlockecole]

To say the least I like it and Pag pretty much hit the nail on the head there.

[Maharg67]

In general I agree with Pagafyr except that it is too easy to flood a book too early with too many details, too much information. I wished to introduce the flow of action first, get the reader knowing what is happening, and then to delve more into the various characters later.

 

Perhaps I have not given enough personal information but all of that is coming, I assure you.

 

Your feedback is most welcome and most helpful, Pagafyr and Flintlockecole. :thumbsup:

[Maharg67]

0025: Of Lucky Eddie and the Whirla of Fate #25

 

“What exactly is the Whirla of Fate? Is it some kind of powerful artifact?” Lucky Eddie spoke as they moved further over the floor of the vast domechamber. “The poor twisted Aldmer held a sphere like artifact that I considered might be it?”

 

Lucky Eddie was puzzled not about the speed of how he had come to be so close to the Aldmer woman but how smoothly, how 'naturally' it seemed to happen. He began to realize that he had always kept a wall up between himself and most others with only a very few exceptions. They were back in the Academy and were only a tiny number of those to be found there. It surprised him to realize that he had been always closer to three of his instructors than he had been to many metahumans. Too numerous metahumans had become brutal monsters thanks to the way that they were treated.

 

“No, the Whirla of Fate could not be held in a hand.” She gave him a troubled look, by calm faced Aldmeri way of things. “What did the twisted Aldmer look like. Was it a man or a woman?”

 

Was the Aldmer telling him the truth, the whole truth and nothing but the truth? Lucky Eddie doubted it but he found himself unwilling to push her and willing to trust that she would give forth more answers in due time. As it was, as events began to catch up with him, he had a good deal to adjust to anyway with out AlekiNovanis adding yet more information for him to absorb.

 

“A man! He was horrifically distorted.” Lucky Eddie made a copy of the picture appear in his left hand. Until then he had not even known he could do such a trick but it had cost him 1fgc. “I drew this from memory for I glimpsed him briefly before I teleported away with some companions. What is your name?”

 

She looked to him with an odd half smile. “It is rude manners to ask a name like that, by Aldmeri custom, but you are young. You may call me AshelAshae. You will be my little brother and you will behave yourself.”

 

Lucky Eddie could not think of anything to say. Somehow he had been adopted and he found, oddly enough, that he liked it but was confused. Still he had to admit he was that way about a few things so what did it matter if he gained a few more?

 

“Yes, it does not surprise me that AlekiNovanis would do this to himself in his greed for knowledge and power, in his narrow focused arrogance and false assumptions of his own genius.” AshelAshae studied the picture carefully. “Do you mind if I keep this?”

 

“You can have that and much else.” Lucky Eddie responded with a grin. “Big Sister!”

 

She sighed softly. “Come on, Little Brother! I 'sense' the vazgen-atoma is close and that it is fully functional, being inside its own generated preservation field.”

 

He looked around at the great black statues with their golden parts, ornamentation and embellishments. It came to him that they were of great importance, that they were somehow a strong clue to what had been happening, most likely for a vastly long time, and what was going on. Lucky Eddie felt that he was stumbling in the dark but was far from the only one doing so.

 

One of the big statues was a bigger version of the Lady of Fate statues found elsewhere, that had been in the cavern he had first appeared in, in Tamriel. Other than size it was identical in appearance. He wondered if the statues represented some kind of deities such as 'Gods and Goddesses of Fate'. There were no neat clues such as nice big signs such as one might find in an art gallery.

Edited August 17, 2012 by Maharg67

[Maharg67]

0026: Of Lucky Eddie and the Whirla of Fate #26

 

The vazgen-atoma sparkle shimmered into visibility, a globe shaped vehicle like a crystal-ball but with a circular couch inside facing inward to a console. It had a base of black and copperish metallic materials along with three doors into the fair sized globe.

 

They sat in it, putting backpacks into a special storage cabin accessible from both inside and outside the globe cabin. Lucky Eddie sat quietly while AshelAshae semiactivated the vazgen-atoma and began checking its network-systems through a control console.

 

After a moment she shook her head. “Needs a big boost in recharging and some regenerative repairing done. We may have to leave the vazgen-atoma here.”

 

Lucky Eddie touched a console in front of him and the whole vazgen-atoma shimmered softly for just a few seconds but some things did change. The Aldmer woman observed the console screen in front of her with much evident surprise.

 

He gave a mild grin. “I fed some of my fategame-player resources into the vazgen-atoma but it remains of you, of your family and your family-clan. Not only has it become fully its old self but it has new abilities and some nice surprises. Well, I hope you will find them to be nice surprises. The small, cramped storage cabin behind us is still so but is now also an airlock style entrance chamber to a much bigger chamber with antechambers, alcoves and other useful features. The vazgen-atoma is now bigger inside than it is outside and it can teleport longer distances than it used to be able to and in a much safer fashion. It also has other tricks but it will take time to understand and use them properly. I hope you don't mind the changes, and other changes, on top of other changes.”

 

The Mer gave him an odd smile, by human standards, and nodded. “Your generosity will go well with the family-clan and the family. I suggest that we go from here. Something attacked me and put me into the Preserving Jadei a very long time ago. It could have destroyed me but chose not to do so. The attack was sudden and overwhelming. I could not identify the attacker, not even its basic nature.”

 

The horrifying newcomers came into the huge domechamber with a rush of erratic motion, three hulking distorted Aldmer in hooded robes, carrying long metallic staffs of electrum, each topped with a glowing crystal sphere that looked something like the one that the deformed AlekiNovanis had clutched in his hand.

 

“Damned fools, those are WhirlKeys linked to the Whirl of Fate, their basic name. Though powerful in their own right, they are supposedly ways of being guided to the Whirl of Fate and to accessing its secrets once one has found the Whirl of Fate.” AshelAshae shook her head. “Those fools tried to use WhirlKeys as they might powerful Mer magical artifacts by trying to control them through use of specialized kinds of quasimagical staffs. Clearly they have paid the price. We must go before they detect us. I am not sure even the new, improved, vazgen-atoma would hold back an attack by all three of those... abominations.”

 

Lucky Eddie touched some controls and the whole vazgen-atoma shimmered softly. “We are now concealed by a cloaking field that keeps us well hidden. I suggest we observe what the three newcomers do. Perhaps we will learn something from doing so.”

 

There was something truly unnerving about the three newcomers, something that was unnatural as if they were not truly Aldmer anymore. Lucky Eddie had 'sensed' that about the first one he had glimpsed. The 'unnaturalness' had come from the figures being terribly, fundamentally, malformed by vastly potent forces beyond their control.